__We are all, of our own style... "never second guess your form, just compete with it." __Not attempting to be instructive, I haven't the credentials so to do. This, then, is just to explain my 'style,' right or wrong.
flashes across this turning pond days end
L1, let the reader imagine the color. ___(Autumn tree colors? sunset colors?) L2, here, gravity draws the heavier -colder- water to the pond's bottom, the warmer water rises and the pond is said to be "turning," an autumn kigo. _m
__We are all, of our own style... "never second guess your form, just compete with it."
ReplyDelete__Not attempting to be instructive, I haven't
the credentials so to do. This, then, is just to explain my 'style,' right or wrong.
flashes
across this turning pond
days end
L1, let the reader imagine the color.
___(Autumn tree colors? sunset colors?)
L2, here, gravity draws the heavier -colder- water to the pond's bottom, the warmer water rises and the pond is said to be "turning," an autumn kigo.
_m
Your beautiful haiku
ReplyDeletesilver flashes
from a spring lake
gathering me in
And my additional verse, (renku 7+7)
the petals falling
as like rain
sakuo.